Thanks for your feedback and for posting your swing.
I want to make you aware of one thing in your golf swing that will stop you missing your shots out to the right.
You will notice at the top of your backswing from the front on angle the club is very close to your head/body.
This means that you lack width in the swing
Ideally you would like to see space between the shaft of your club and your head at the top of the swing.
this will make your swing feel shorter, this may be how it feels but it will in fact, be wider.
If you were to video your golf swing from behind you, you would see that your right arm folds back onto itself at the top. This is the perfect way to see how narrow the top of the backswing is.
One of the worst tips in the world that keeps many coaches in business is "keep your left arm straght" You may think that this is what you will need to do to maintain width, this will only create tension during the swing and will have the opposite effect to what you are trying to do.
Try this
At the top of your swing try and get your right hand as far away from your right shoulder as you can. Straightaway you will be wider. At the top of the swing the right hand, elbow and shoulder should make a simple 90degree angle,you then maintain this into the start of the downswing.
As I suggest to most of my pupils, make a lot of dry (no ball) slow motion swngs with a prolonged pause at the top of the swing to really feel the position of the arms and club during the motion
Use this as a practice swing on the course and you will gradually find an improvement to your ball striking and direction control
Blimey
That looks loads better!!
really pleased you played well
Try and video your swing from behind you (showing your backside) and develop awareness of the right arm at the top
Remember, it will fell short, but it is wider
You can now see space between the club shaft and your head at the top